Read If You Are An Interesting Person :)?

ookay, my friend wrote this, and wants to know if its any good. shes freakkin out cuz she has to turn it in, and thinks it sucks. this is only the first paragraph, but what do youu think?
“Blythe Carlyle felt pre-party flutters directly behind her belly button. It was ten minutes before she got into her families custom made limousine, and cruised down park avenue, to the Vanity Fair opening party, and she still hadn’t decided on what earrings to wear with her floor length, Grecian inspired Theia evening gown. Her heart skipped a beat when she heard her mother, Olivia Carlyle, knock loudly on the door. Blythe! Come down, Ivan is waiting!”, she yelled through the closed door, her hand still on the diamond encrusted knob. “Okay, Mom! I’m coming!”, she responded. Blythe knew Ivan, her driver of six years, wouldn’t have a problem waiting a few minutes. She quickly rummaged through her custom made wooden and ruby covered jewelry box for the diamond drop earrings she had just recently gotten for her sixteenth birthday. Once she slid them in, took one last glance in her Kallista vanity, and gracefully made her way through the hall of the huge penthouse apartment that her family owned.”